You look so comfy
Yes you do
But I must avoid you
But my homework is bumpy
I’m getting a little grumpy
I want to be glued
to you
You are so lovely
With two warm blankets
Has its has habits
To have seven pillows
Each with its own purpose
You look like a circus
Lacking your smooth surface
Hi Jennifer. I can only give you half credit on this blog assignment. While you do have 14 lines, and you do have a distinction between parts (an octave and a sestet), I don't see work done on trying to get at iambic pentameter. Both traditional sonnets and their contemporary versions are still trying for a rhythmic line. You're welcome to recover points if you'd like to send me a newer version via e-mail. Thanks. --W
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